The first western i've read on this site. I liked it

i thought that it was a very well written, fast read. it was very good, and i only had a few suggestions,
“Let me just kill you,” the man said.- sounded a tad, random and it was a little distracting, perhaps rephrase, or omit the quote.

other than that, i thought it was perfect :)

oh damn!! Surprise ending. i liked it. a lot. some great descriptions. the only line that bothered me was "and shot the man in the face" it seemed too...forward, if you get what i'm saying maybe you should try "and he pulled the trigger" anywho, good work. this is i believe the first western i have read on here, and i enjoyed it. nice:)