I saw your question on the SKOW group and thought I'd check it out. I don't know if your teacher read some of this before he declared it unlikely or if he'd only heard your description, but I think it's the combination of her having inherited so much from her grandmother and her guardianship situation that combined are so unbelievable.

Anyway, it's your story so do what you'd like within reason.

Another great chapter =] I love these characters, and the story itself.

Update as soon as you can!

Nice start; looking forward to reading more! I like Ainsley.

Haha, loved this chapter! =]
Your writing is really good.

I can't wait to find out what happens, update soon!

keep on goin now dont you stop for any thing update add a flipen chapterr please

*does happy dance* I am so happy! Happy happy happy! You made my day updating right now. So thank-you! XD
I loved the chapter...this is where the game gets interesting huh?
-Moon Night

Okay Amanda, now you know that was way too short! Ugh! Damn!

*“He was hot,” I answered with a shrug. Why not go for the truth? “But a little...I don’t know. It’s like you both weird me out in two different ways.” I held my glass in my hand and spun it around on the table.*

That was a good chapter!! Update soon. :P Oh, and the brother is a little out there...but I like his character. Very interesting.

Oh my GOD!
Dude you gotta hurry up and post more... I'm sitting here reading--letting my little child run wild and terrorize the joint--I'm caught up in this story...
Damn, I'm in love with Logan!
OMG! THis is F'n insane. I am seriously wanting to know whats next...
Logan is so DAMN mysterious, with his "cold" skin.

Come one Amanda...I wish I could have this in hand--you ought to think about publishing--I'll be first in line to buy...UGH!

I saw your post in the advertising forum so I decided to check out your story...and I'm really glad I did because this is really, really good! I love how it's realistic, but not enough so it's overly typical. I think Ainsley is extremely likable too. This is really good work and I hope you keep writing =]

Ok. I'm really diggin "Suburban Urgency." I just wish my eyes could read on to the next chapter. Between staring at computers all day and my PSP, its murder on my vision.

Anyway, to my review:
Logan...I love his character, he seems mysterious, and I use that word heavily. His personality traits and the way you describe him is highly appealing.
*“No,” he drew out the syllable and it rolled off his perfect— Wow, his mouth wasalmost perfect. Not too puffy and perfectly balanced. The problem was internal then, because his mouth was the thing that had generally annoyed me from the beginning*

Love the story cant wait until you write more :)

T.T
I like her. She's one of a kind. Her character is awesome and finely developed. I love how you put in the details, it gives you an idea of her life and all.
Update soon plz!
-Moon Night

Hello!

I liked this chapter, but there were a WHOLE lot of grammatical mistakes that made the chapter a little hard to read. Commas were missing at some points, and punctuation was incorrect. Also, some phrasing was a little awkward.

One question I have is: if she's so rich, why does she have to work?

Anyway, great chapter. Update soon! I can't wait to find out what happens at the club. :]

certainly you have some very good writing skills. This story isn't one I would read, but i'm sure there are many others who would love to read this.