 Faithless Juliet 2009-04-28 . chapter 2It can be taken either literal, or metaphorical -
One could find the religion of 'the mother' or look at it, in terms of nature, animals need their mothers to survive.
The last verse "Bringf me seed" makes me think of humanity creating anew. Good job.
Much love,
Juliet. |
 Faithless Juliet 2009-04-28 . chapter 1You present the reader with thought provoking questions here, even with such a short piece. I really liked it.
Much love,
Juliet. |
 scarlet stars 2009-04-22 . chapter 2I love the capitalization of mother, but not i. Interesting. I think the second stanza is pretty strong, but regarding the poem as a whole, the imagery is not that original. I like your word choice however, such as "fecund", "lush loam", etc. Nice! Can't wait for you to post more chapters, this is definitely going on my Story Alert ;) |
 scarlet stars 2009-04-22 . chapter 1I am genuinely very impressed with this poem. Brilliant questions. I am excited to read the rest. |
 Aquafied 2009-04-12 . chapter 2it sounds like a pregnancy poem
just at the end
but it has a lot of spring, a lot of nature
like you're actually inside of mother nature herself |
 Isca 2009-04-11 . chapter 2It's fitting that you began with the genital-related chakra since it's Spring.
"Grace my flower." I'm glad that you alluded to the 'lotus' symbolism associated with this chakra.
I also like the fact that you're using the Eastern approach, and by implication, referring to the 'Upanishads.'
:)
Write on,
-Isca |
 Isca 2009-04-09 . chapter 1This caught my attention. Will you be taking a Western or Eastern approach to the seven major chakras? |
 white to gray 2009-01-04 . chapter 1I couldn't resist favoriting this for two reasons:
The subtle rawness that somehow gripped me when I read this, and the smile I felt springing up out of me afterwards.
Simple and lovely and quiet. |
 no.peace.los.angeles 2008-12-01 . chapter 1Oh, I am looking forward to reading those. Fantastic idea. This alone is great. Very philosophical. Lovely. Keep writing! :) |
 Aquafied 2008-11-28 . chapter 1are you going to start at the top of the body and go down
or vica versa?
or are they going to just be scrambled
interesting
i've heard of chakras before
but i suppose i hadn't put too much thought into it |