painted a beautiful image in my mind! its amazing how you can create such a vivid atmosphere with so few words. wonderful.

boys make me lose my head
unfortunate and lucky

This is a nice poem. It has an intersting image. One that will probably resonate with readers for a long time to come. What I like best about this is it's implicity. All too often I read poetry that doesn't know when to stop, or just overloads the reader with pictures that don't add anything to the poem.

But you gave one strong image, and whats even better is that it told a story. A snapshot into a person (or group of people's) way of life. I found myself reading this a few times actually.
Beautiful!