|Reviews for All Things Have Their Cost|
| Xerophyte 11/26/08 . chapter 1
I love this.
I feel like it keeps getting stronger toward the end. The last line is absolutely perfect. I'm honestly surprised that you rhymed-that's never really been your type. But you do it quite well. One suggestion which you may completely and totally throw out. For rhythm's sake, in the "Upon the beauty you've lost" line, add a syllable, like "upon the beauty you have lost" or"upon the beauty that you've lost." This way it fits the natural rhyme scheme you created earlier in the poem.
As usual, a WONDERFUL piece of work. Love.
| bipedalcooney 11/26/08 . chapter 1
Really lovely writing. I think the pondering tone of this piece is great. Awesome work, keep writing!