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FlirtyBirdie 12/27/09 . chapter 3make out buddy- good times! |
FlirtyBirdie 12/27/09 . chapter 2the text convo isnt lame its realistic. :D i love the milk pouring btw! |
FlirtyBirdie 12/27/09 . chapter 1lol. i love tyhe oh crap ending! |
Chloeee 8/26/09 . chapter 3Very good xD I loved how Olivia is always pissed off coz of Trent hahaha xD Update soon! |
CherryTwister 8/14/09 . chapter 3I just read your story and it's great! Please update soon! I want more :) |
WinMyHeart5444 8/14/09 . chapter 3Hahahahahahahaha abstinence pledge? I totally would have died! I love Trent and Olivia's relationship, it is so adorable. John is a a-hole though, Sasha should take a rock and pound him in the head with hit. Awh, she likes him. :) I love this chapter and I cannot wait for the next one! I have a suggestion for the next chapter, if you want to hear it. I'll PM you and let you know. I love this so much, I cannot wait to read more! |
WinMyHeart5444 8/14/09 . chapter 2Hello again! *"Trent Howards. The Trent Howards. He was to be my partner for the whole summer. Anyone have a bottle of cyanide? Maybe a gun? Olivia thought as she watched the said football player walk towards her." Make this one sentence. Haha I love the part where she asks for tweedle dee. That made me laugh :) No way! I'd never have the guts to dump milk on someone :) I like Trent so far, he seems really cool. Olivia too. :P |
WinMyHeart5444 8/14/09 . chapter 1Hello! I'll review as I read :) *These 2 sentences "It was different from what she expected. What she honestly expected was a filthy run down dump with cockroaches and rats swarming around everywhere." Replace the period with a comma, it will eliminate the choppiness :) Also, instead of using expected twice, I'd substitute with another word like "It was different than she had first thought, what she had expected, honestly, was a filthy run down dump with cockroaches and rats swarming everywhere." Haha, story of my life. I'd be absolutely lost without my iPod and my books. Oh, how I would tire of the world without them :) I would like to bunk with boys. I think it would be fun ;) I love the ending sentence! Cliff hanger! Also, I am a huge fan of short chapters. They make the time go by faster, although I can never seem to write any... Oh well :( *Suggestion: I'd just go back and reread. Just put in comas and such in places. I love it so far! |
i love life 2/4/09 . chapter 3gr8 chapter update soon pls |
StrandedOnYou 1/29/09 . chapter 3OMFG! u actually updated :) and i have had a make out buddy before haha anway i liked this chapter and i agree she should atleast have a lil fun D HURRY UP AND FLIPPIN UPDATE |
calmthestorm 1/21/09 . chapter 3Another great chapter! Loved it, please update asap! : ) |
calmthestorm 1/21/09 . chapter 2:) LOVE IT ! PLEASE UPDATE SOON, I CANT WAIT ! |
SecretFeelings 12/18/08 . chapter 2um okay, a few things to say. It's rushed, the characters are stupid and way to fake. You dont give them a real personality, just throw out, she's shy even though we really know nothing about her yet. a few other things too but I'm tired and i want to go to bed |
Roselyn Flores 12/16/08 . chapter 2This is really good, and I like it alot. There were a few spelling errors but that's okay. I hope you updaye this story soon! Tootles, Roselyn Flores |
xspringdaizyx 12/14/08 . chapter 2GOOD! Keep writing I check everyday to see if you've written anything everyday i get dissappointed. Keep up the good work. I love it! |