LOVE the family guy reference ;]
she better get to see her dad again some time in the future.. I know she has more questions for him
I'm not too sure about this xander character.. seems kinda iffy to me..

hmm...you have successfully confused me. Bravo.
I have no idea what's going to happen next.
And I like the adoption twist.

Hmm..interesting.

Now that I'm reading and thinking about it, your teenagers are a little advanced in english for their age. Not so much Xander..just Seidon & Rose at times.
And watch your wordiness. Sometimes you use the same word like 5 times in 3 sentences.. You know how it bugs me..

I do like how the weird guy actually spoke and introduced himself this time instead of just staring at her and freaking the girl out.
And I like his mysteriousness.

Hi, it's looks like you need a review! Which is great, because I have plenty to say.

First off, I like the premise. And the writing style, it's very to-the-point without being dry. Your characters feel very real and believable. I also love the slow introduction of teh characters and plot. At first I was scared it was going to be a stereotypical emo love story, but it definitely isn't. It's very original.

But I do have negative comments, too. The letter to the parents was definitely well-written adn conveyed the right emotion, but sort of came off as a little whiny after a while. Also, in the second chapter, Rosemary rolls her eye like three times. Repition of one thing can make her seem childish. Lastly, be careful of their speech patterns. They're teenagers, and unless they're freakishly smart, they should talk like teenagers. At one point in this chapter, I feel like Seidon was speaking more maturely than he should.

Anyway, I hope that was helpful. Please feel free to contact me if you have any comments, questions, or justifications.

Hmm..weird.
The reaper guy just like randomly showed up..
Is she going to die soon?

Kudos to you.

Wow. I like it. I really do. I'm intrigued.
So write more soon okay?

Hmm..nice entrance.
It sounds like a suicide note, which worries me a little.

On to chapter one!