I love this story please write more. I'm a little confused, but you're probably going to clear that up in later chapters.

Very well written. This was a pleasure to read.
I do wonder what is wrong about a society where two women -- 'Innocent, innocuous, a finely dressed lady and her maid' --travel without guards and arrive at their destination without molestation. We see one hungry poor woman and the heroine mentions unfair taxes, but we also see '...well-kept booths lining the streets, attractive apartments behind them. This was the palace market, where high quality merchants sold their wares and rented living space'. The society does not seem unjust enough to result in a revolutionary movement. If the poor are really oppressed, I would expect more guards and more reaction to a noblewoman than an 'accusing stare'.

wow, wow, wow. this is absolutely amazing. you should definately keep this up

This was really good, and i would love for you to continue. I definatley cannot wait for the next chapters. However here are a few suggestions (that you can absolutley ignore =])
a) maybe a description of the main character- it's difficult when I decide that she has, say, black hair and then you write that it is blond later on.
b) you can take it slightly slower if you want to. I thought the pace was almost perfect- but maybe a few more pieces of imagery would be nice.
some things i liked:
a) i already was interested by the main character, she seems witty and passionate, but not a mary-sue. i'm excited to learn more about her.
b) although i feel as though i've heard this story before, i can already tell there will be many surprising twists and turns. I dont know, maybe the Eagle movement isn't what it seems or something.
i am certainly looking forward to the rest of the story...
-S4E