[delicately/with a needle/and ink.] Interesting contrast between delicately and needle. It creates a lovey mix of emotions.

[she shivers] Nice use of alliteration. The sound made by pronouncing the words really embodies the shivering.

[my fingers force themselves into her wings] The use of "force" seems very interesting here, though honestly I can't grasp your meaning. Could just be me ^^;

Nice work overall. Interesting word choices and good use of stanza breaks. You realaly managed to develop a great poem from the prompt.