Wow! Sounds awesome, I think this could definatley be a great story! Please do continue it!

grweat story!
thumbs up! 5\5

this chapter is so good please continue the story
i want to read more. and im pretty sure others do too.

are you going to post any more please do i love it !

Oh, I love it! Strangely, my favourite character so far is Terrence... I don"t know, something got me when he told Kiri she was on drugs >_<

I really liked how you ended the chapter also, it makes great imagery. I had that scene play well in my mind :)

Good job! I hope you update soon :)

Maralie

woeh!
This must be better than any other story you have written!
Well, that's my opinion, since I like fantasy stories.
Well, I hope you get to complete it!...no Im not joking ,serously, you have to write the next chapter soon! AND I MEAN SON!..
well, good luck!
hana