WOW. gorgeous poem.

the last five lines truly took my breath away.


i would love opinions from a talented writer like yourself on my work! it would really mean a lot.

"It is comforting in the aspect/that the sky is adamant, and".. I didn't like the phrasing here. I think it was the word aspect. Aspect of what?

"night, what we see is the past.".. all of the sudden you use we when the rest of the piece is in first person. That seemed odd.

I like the piece though, your descriptions are different. I also like your word choices like ephemeral and inexorable. Nice job.