So sad. =( Very good though. Love the last two lines.

wow.

Beautiful, sad poem. It is really really well written, I read it twice to get the full impact of it. I think that you ment "Here," instead of hear.
Amazing poem

"And a scribled message written by the door".. scribbled
"A beatufiful girl lies hear dead"... beautiful girl lies here
"They didnt see her pain and tears".. didn't
"She was her mothers world".. mother's

I like the mother's world line. It's an interesting and different description. I did get confused. You said her world ended or so she thought? Is she dead or not? Also you review to they and the no one caring then the one person she loved gone. It was confusing who you were talking about. Anyway very sad piece.

How sad...she killed herself...if only it was prevented...I wonder what she had written...

How morbid. The feeling is great!

o my gosh this is really sad. i hope this isnt how u feel. this is very good though. thanx. email me if u want

oh my, sometimes people who kill themselves don't know how hard the people who they leave behind.
heartfelt poem.

This should be not. It's a nice poem, but this should not be.

~Yusuf

i love the half-rhyme with "alone" and "gone"... good stuff. the last two lines are brilliant- really nice work.