As always, your poetry reaches out, grabs me and utterly captivates me.

I love this, please include more.

"and its not coming back."... it's

I liked this piece, especially the first part. I think the ending wasn't as powerful as the first stanza and I also think the "oh, girl" takes away from the tone a bit. Also, I feel like the reader already implies that it's a relationship that's over. The only other thing that seemed odd was hugs. I dunno it seemed kinda silly. I might say a touch or something less innocent.

Anyway I really REALLY loved the first parapgraph. I thought your descriptions were absolutely amazing. I especially liked the "goosebumps layered overs cars" and "half a heartbeat too long" they were so unique and powerful. I also thought your use of line breaks and punctuation worked really well in the piece. Really great job.

"he' feels like home, like, hope."... the apostrophe shouldn't be there

I love the descriptions here, especially "semi-psychotic" and the end last three lines. Those were really interesting and unique. Nice job.

"one person's born, the day another dies."... I don't think you need a comma there

"maybe it had braced itself for the things we couldn’t./maybe it's too detached from itself to care at all.".. you switch tenses there

I like this piece a lot. It makes some really great point, especially with that ending. I think the personification of the earth is great and it's definitely got a lot of emotion. Nice job.

so true, i like all of these, but esp. this one. It's all been spinning around in my head lately.