Wow. beuatiful!

Aloha!
I loved the way you worded this poem. It's very petite and subtle. However, I think you might want to either italisize or somehow set apart the first 'we' of line 5. I think it'll add somewhat to the poem.
Sincerely
Caramir
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The 'we that we share' was confusing at first, almost thought it was a typo, until I got what it was saying.

'Tip-toeing' was a useful word to set the mood of the poem.

I noticed how you used 'fragile' then 'delicate' later on. I wouldn't have noticed if I hadn't scanned over the poem once; I think it was a nice 'subconscious' thing for the reader. It got the point out, twice, without repetition. Or it's just me, haha.

If I knew half a thing about technicalities and stuff for poems, I'd say it; too bad I don't.

Good job nonetheless.

I know I only owed one for RM, but I felt guilty somehow for such a bland review. Haha, by doing this, I doubled the review, but also the bland?

Howdy.

Okay! First of all, I like the way you started it. "Tip- toeing" as the beginning word puts so much emphasis on the main point. And it's good word usage because it gets the idea across incredibly well. I like how you formed the lines, very balanced. Although (I'm pretty sure someone else would have mentioned this already) the line,

"This we that we share"

could've had the first "we" in italics. But I did like the phrase, the play on words. And the lines,

"and we're both
still waiting
for the other to answer
first."

I like the last line being only that one word. Overall, I think the poem flowed well and was of course, very /relatable/.

xD

This piece has a nice concept a good delivery. I'd have to say that I think I'd like it single-spaced but that has nothing to do with the piece itself, so don't listen to me on that.

I think that this presents a very real situation that people can easily relate to. I like how you used "tip-toeing" and "dancing" to describe how the question was being avaided.

"This we that we share / is too delicate" --> There are some lines, including this one, that come of as awkward to being with. The first time I read those lines, I didn't really get them. It took me a few times through. I think that maybe if you italicized the first "we" it might be clearer. It would add definition to that word.

I really like the concept of this piece, though. It reminds me of something I went through two years ago.

Nice piece.

-stix-
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I hate that moved review button as well. I did the same thing you did for mine. (: Anyway.

I see definite differences in our poetic style - I use too many descriptive words (or too uncommon, as may be the case), and you, in my opinion, use too little. While these are pretty words, they aren't original and don't give me a clear picture of what you're asking me to see in writing the poem.

My suggestion would be to use concrete images instead of these vague concepts. Show, don't tell. Use your senses. All of that old advice you've heard so much that you've forgotten it - believe me, it is worth listening to and utilizing.

Good work.

~Effervescent-Sentiments

I liked how you used "tip-toeing" and "dancing around".
The only thing that confused me was it sounds like they're avoiding to ask a question in the beginning, but it sounds like they're avoiding answering a question at the end.
Nice poem overall. :)

Merry Christmas, Ace! Wohoo! I hate your poem, and here's why! XD Haha jk.

"Tip-toeing"
You use punctuation and rules of proper grammar for the rest of the piece, and this isn't the title, so I therefore think it would be appropriate to have a period afterwards :=D

"of us.
This we that we share"
Both those read strangely to me. Maybe if you put "us" and "we" in quotations or used italics to emphasize and makes it an overall easier read?

But overall (overall is my fav word in reviews, btw) I think it was a nice and sweet read, since it was nicely worded. Particularly liked the emphasis at the end, it created much more impact on the issue (on who is gonna reply first).

Bye~!

-Frac

I think the first four lines are my favorite, but the latter ones are cute and romantic in a hesitant, realistic way. Good.

This poem was really realistic and sweet! :)

~Isca

Simple and cute.