You did an astonishing job writing the action! Furthermore, it's incredibly easy to imagine everything that is happening because of the way you write; almost as if it's a movie. Keep up the fabulous work!

Awesome; your descriptive paragraphs were placed just right between the action and feelings of the main character. You also did a very good job at bringing the horse to life, and using Indian names for the characters makes it all the more unique. You also blended a flashback into this chapter nicely, and you put a little comedy to keep the reader happy, which makes it very interesting. Keep up the fabulous work.