 Aamori 2008-12-04 . chapter 1Wow, that was really good. The idea was something pple encounter everyday but rarely think about as a subject for poetry. However, I think it could have been a bit smoother in some place, like:
"So I'm pretty sure you're not
It hurts too much to think of you as a friend
When you treat me like I'm not"
I think the wording could have been better, but overall it was a great poem. |