He, I really love the guys, they're so cute! I like how you were telling the story with both the fairy tale and what they were saying. I imagine writing in pretty much only dialogue is a little difficult, but I think you did very well. Thanks for sharing!

I love how much thought you always put into your stories. Other peoples' are entertaining too, but they often forget things like "what happens after," "what happened before," "how do the other characters influence the main and each other," "how does this shape the character" and how the character thinks. I admire your intuition and insight (haha, I'm not sure whether these would be the right words.) I probably haven't said this before, but I really look up to you.

Anyways for any errors I found:

"...been forced to stay in the shrine as the hamlet gather the money to send him to the temple." Probably gathered?

"He would not be able fathom Vishtani reluctance to be taken by the avatar." I think you forgot to put the possessive on there.

And now for more praise. ;)

I liked Vishtani and the infirmary priest a lot. They seem like extremely intriguing characters, with a lot of depth. I also liked your concept of gods, where they are not perfect, but are also rather selfish, self-satisfied beings. They remind me of the Norse and Graeco-Roman gods/goddesses, from what I could tell.

Thank you for updating. This was very pleasant to come home to.

Whoa. You always amaze me, and this is no different. Simply beautiful.

Needed some inspiration and thought I'd check out what you've written -- I like the idea of having multiple one-shots! I like the last one best -- Alex's siter was listening in on them, right? ;)

I liked it! Was fun. I thought I'd have trouble keeping track of who said what, but I did fine...

Only thing was (I think I'm dumb) I didn't get the bit about the movie at the end. Felt like I missed a clever joke.

Hahah, how cute. The last paragraph made me laugh. I like how you introduce past events, so that even though the reader did not witness it, it is clear what happened.

I liked :) would be interesting to get another version of this, with more description - personally I like descriptions, love being able to read and imagine the places and actions. The fairy tale idea was nice and new. *supports any other one shot you make*

I like this one very much, the lack of descriptions builds anticipation well. My favorite part of your writing is always the pacing, so many writers go too slowly or too fast, but even when you change styles, your pacing is still as great as always. Gah... what I'm trying to say is that I love this one-shot.

This is really lovely. I like how Jack, while being beaten still has a backbone. Plus the fact they didn't drink; I don't like when a couple gets together because of alcohol (although fighting because of the vile substance is a-okay, haha.) Jack's sudden aggressiveness at the end was a little unexpected; in the scene with the sister, he seemed more... for lack of a better word, passive-aggressive, but then he /is/ young. Yup, sorry I can't give better critique.

+Andy

wish someone would send me an email like that :(

u write so well :)

this is good