Very, very good. You choose your words to great effect, and the dialogue was very strong. There were a few parts that didn't quite fit (for example, I don't think your characteriation of the minor characters quite came together), but overall it was an interesting piece. Keep writing!

AW!! This was so cute and sweet. I like Savannah as a character, definitely, but I kind of...hated Eric. He was just there. I mean, he was slightly interesting, but I didn't connect with him. I thought Abigail was particularly amusing, and Piotr the Polack made me want to cry with laughter.

I didn't get the First City, Third City thing..what's that?

But overall, great job. The ending was adorable!!

Amazing! Sweet and thought provoking! Favorited for sure. (:

My GOSH, that was WONDERFUL! I've needed a story like that for what seems like a million years. Thank you! :D