I'm reviewing on a cell phone so this may be a little short but I'm finally getting around to giving you a much needed review. Your description and characterization are wonderful and this chapter pulled me in very quickly. I really like Yuki's chatacter snd I'll be reading more of this wonderful story.
Keep up the good work.

Seems interesting enough. Yuki seems pretty damn average, and that's always good for future character development. Can't really say much other than keep writing...then again, you're nearly up to two hundred chapters so it's a bit late to say that.

Sorry...
-Strife

What a real long impressive story.
You cool , you can write . I am admire you.
I will wait your next period.
Have a splendid idea.

so far it is a great story the only problem i see it that the length is a bit extreme needs to be toned down a bit

Its been a while hasn't it? Yeah school this year is a lot more work than I thought it would be and so I don't much me time anymore. So I'll review your chapters when ever I have time like today.

Anyways I think I called it with the whole Yumi thing having someone or something else in her body...I think I might of mentioned that at one point to you. If not oh well. I've always found things like Yumi situation with Masa interesting, as I've seen it done a handful of animes and I'm curious to see how you are going to handle it so its not the same as all other anime.

Also the thing with Fumiko, Seiji, and Yumi's powers is interesting as they don't use the same power as the Atlanteans. I know you'll explain it later on in the story, but I really want to know why and how they got their powers.

It feels good to come back to this story after a while of being away. And it's also good to know that you quality hasn't been lacking either other than some misspellings here and there (but then again I can't judge). Regardless I hope you know that I'm still reading your great story even though I don't review every chapter. All that being said I will be waiting for your next chapter!

I love the way your descriptions, very well done. At first when I saw how many chapters you had I was like, omg i'm never going to catch up, but they're fairly short so that makes it better haha

Pilot episodes rarely ever take place in a alternative universe... That was a bit confusing, but I'll accept it since the story is really interesting so far. Very nice work!

Interesting story.

I finally caught up with your chapters! I don't know how long it took, but i did it! All I have to say is i'm impressed by the scope of the fights that you've written. I'm really liking Seiji and his fights right now, it's intense right now. Though I sort of wish there wasn't so much fighting and more character interaction, but then again you need the fights. Anyway sorry that it took me so long to review but school started up again and I've been busy so it might take me a while to review your chapters. Regardless I still am looking forward to your updates in the near future!

Wow! This is awesome! This feels like a real pilot for a anime/manga! Only real issue for me was the was a bit too much buildup leading to the climax and probably should be split into two parts, but this is understandsble based on your statement that this pilot is a combination of the first few chapters of the main story. Hope I can catch up... (153 chapters to go!)

Hey there. Picked up this piece quite some time ago. But seeing it in my pal Sock my Rock's community prompted me to read more. So um, yeah. Basically me sucking up for your eventual review of my story. Teehee. *Smirks mischievously*

So far, these fourteen chapters are still introductory for me. I have a decent grasp of your characters, though I have yet to take a specific like or dislike to any of them. Their interactions I find to be a good breather. Of course you have the occasional teen anxiety, but they are not without reason. Ayumi . . . seems a bit more harsh than she should be at times though, but I'm sure her reasons will be played out.

Kudos for your interesting concept of these unique powers coming forth from the mind. You've written your action scenes in good detail, though I admit so far they are your stereotypical Shounen, but it's all up to my expectations. Still too early for me to comment on anything more.

And last I would like to give my thoughts on your writing style. You did good showing of detail in quite a number of scenes like the battles. There is definitely flow to your writing.

I do have a little issue, however, with the many times you 'tell' in your writing. You tell what your characters' feelings, decisions or thoughts are most of the time instead of showing merely their actions as they are. You tell so much about the character's relations, instead of just showing how they interact with each other, and there's where I lose a bit of interest at times. I just can't keep up with all the information dumped onto me. Still, I do like how I can portray all the imagery in my head when you show, some great writing there.

Well, that's all I have to say for now. I'll definitely keep on reading!

I just became a huge Yumi fan! I find hat voice that she hears is interesting and I'm positive that it's going to play a huge role later on in the story. Everything is continuing to falling into place. Atlantis seems to be your usual civilization where government is a bit oppressive, and the troops don't care who they kill as long as they get the job done. Can't wait to see where you'll be taking it from here!

I guess it's time for the next arc. I'm glad that Yuki and his friend are going with him. That way it's not just him and Ayumi. Oh I have a feeling that pooh is going to hit the fan when they get there. Looking forward to what you have in store in next!

Well it was interesting seeing everyone's life after Yuki could control his power. It me get to feel more for the characters that I already knew, and I started to take a liking to more (including Ayumi :P). Which makes me starts to think that Yuki is interested in Ayumi... or is just my imagination. Anyway still loving your story and just gonna keep reading more!

Yuki finally became a man! And it seems that his powers are a whole lot stronger than expected. Good to see that Yuki doesn't need to depend on anyone anymore for protection. I wonder what's going to happen now that Yuki can control his powers. This story is still great and I hope it keeps getting better as I go along!