Oh, gosh. You're awesome for getting these emotions into words without making it sound like every other story about unrequited love on FicPress.

Loved the analogy type thing at the beginning and the "delays" and all. Clever. (And the bit about the fluorescent lights? Very, very nice.)

I almost wish they hadn't met the way they did, though. I don't know; it almost undermined the [You were just the guy. And I was just the girl.] bit because there are so many stories that start like that and I just feel that this piece would be a bit more real if they'd met more "normally." But that scene was hilarious.

And yeah, great writing. It seems like you really got in touch with your characters so that you could make your readers feel that same connection - I swear, when he patted her on the head at the end, I was so UPSET. How dense can you be, right?

Nice piece.

Keep writing!

;)becky

This was very sweet It even made me cry. Though thats not saying much since i cry over everything Lol

Oh, my. That was great. Slightly confusing at some points, but nontheless, amazing. An amazing peice of writing. Great job. You earn any award you get.

Love, Dani

Was this told in second person?

Anyways, I loved it. It was kinda hard to follow which made it a challenge for me to read. I really liked it though. Great story. I loved the ending.

I like how Taylor Swift's songs popped in my head when I read this :D

Quirky.

What the heck! how could the main guy not end up falling in love with her. you see, in these times of love, it just shows me how wrong i can be sometimes about love. i hate it when friendships break up. and i hate it when you like a guy and he ends up falling in love with someone else. you know, he was supposed to be your love story. your love story. but he didn't end up as THE guy. so sad.

I love it. Really... wow. Thanks for sharing this!

Aw I loved your story even though it made me tear up a bit. Parts of it reminds me of some things in my life...well at least the happy parts! I really loved this though.

usually i would be happy that this story wasn't a happy ending. sometimes it's nice to read something different and real at the same time you know. but yours was achingly beautiful and well written that i felt really really sorry for her to the point that i want her to have a happy ending. i really love this one shot!

This is beautiful.

Unrequited love is the best! I liked how you ended it with a cliffhanger, never really letting the reader know if she got paired up with the guy in the end. (Which she obviously didn't.) It was good, it had me hooked, and this time... I was even hoping for a happy ending! Which I don't do often... well... :)

Beautiful work of art, nearly made me cry. Good job on this!

I don't really see how the beginning ties in cohesively with the rest of the story (maybe it's a metaphorical thing I blindly missed), but other than, beautifully written, very amazing oneshot. (: I'm jealous that Queen of Absolutely Everything got to add this to our c2 before I did. XD

Dude, that was ridiculously sweet. Bad a bitter kind of sweet. I loved it. On one hand I kept wishing that he would turn around and be like, "Bam! I love you too!" but I know that would have kinda ruined the story a little. The ending at least-which I loved.

Good job!

Mia

i don't know what to say.

this story touched me so much and i absolutely loved it.