| Reviews for Sound of Your Eyes |
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The Hippie Nerd 12/9/08 . chapter 1There's an indescribable beauty to this... It feels shorter as well as longer than it actually is, somehow. You pack so much emotion and thought into each little line. I really like how you describe the sound of the eyes as your "anthem," and the very engaging dialogue you have take place between the two in the poem. I could go over all my favourite lines ("You held me in your quicksand arms," "And I saw the dimensions of my world / In you," etc), but there's a bunch. Simply put, there's an elegance to them, and they drip in emotion. There's a sadness that is prevalent through it all that comes through so effectively. I especially liked his description of "home," very interesting. Well done! |
Nemonus 12/7/08 . chapter 1I lovelovelove "It was the only moment/I could pull my hands/Away from your glowing/I looked to see/If I still existed", especially those last two lines, and "your looks dissected me". There were awesome lines in here, showing the intensity of the relationship, really bringing it to the level of the universe. I think line flow could be worked on (rhythm; maybe you need some periods to let the reader take a breath between lines), but it really was excellent. |
Isca 12/7/08 . chapter 1"I saw the dimensions of my world in you." I burst into tears. What else could I do? Such beauty...such sorrow... "I looked to see if I still existed." Heart-breaking. I also loved how this line connected back to the 'glowing' imagery. Very creative! "Or if I'd loved you all the way into oblivion." That line made me think of Shakespeare: the idea that true love loves someone 'until the edge of doom.' "It was my anthem." That line is a gust of wind. What a force of wonder. "A lion in my heart." I'm crying again. MC, your writing just evolved. Brilliance. Writing straight from the soul. -Isca |