Not as strong as either of the others. The rhyme scheme is good though. Also like the very subtle back story revealed in "while pressed into his side."

Once again awesome job. I don't think this one is as strong as the previous "winter" one, but it's none-the-less pretty good. Your personification in this poem is awesome: The rain breathing.
Also, characterizing restlessness as what seems like an animal-great idea.

This poem is absolutely astounding. You keep the motifs so well throughout the poem. It builds so subtly, but powerfully on itself.
And the imagery is amazing. Brown fish whispering secrets. So beautiful.
This is truly a poem. It makes you feel emotion, unlike a lot of the regurgitated crap on here. I don't think I can give this piece enough praise. I'll be reading subsequent chapters in hope you've created something as beautiful.