Syllables look good to me :)

I love your use of formatting. Very interesting and eye-catching for such a short piece.

I also like that this has a contrast in it. I believe that's a requirement of a real hiaku, which people tend to forget on this site.

Nice work :)

Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile)

Clever. I like the subject, you don't often hear from the person being yelled at from an online perspective. The syllables seem fine.

Peace, Daze

I had fun counting the syllables :) Great haiku.

Cheers,

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