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pinkfairydust 2009-08-08 . chapter 1
Very, very powerful. Well done :)
Written 2008-12-11 . chapter 1
hey there. wow, I really like this, seriously. I'm not sure how to interpret it, especially since it's two in the morning, but I love the way it sounds in my head; just awesome. love the mentions of light and dark.

my favorite:

Yours
yours only
possession in the singular
(what is possessed cannot share with you)
so it is only you
in the dark
possessing
alone

just... cool. very well done!

oh, and also this:

[...
When you try to catch

Catch me, you Silly Thing
I won’t change you]

I just love the way that entire part is broken up.

fave-ing it and now going to bed haha. good night!
Silveralsa 2008-12-08 . chapter 1
Though I have missed/forgotten some of your previous poetry, from what I remember, this feels very different in style. It's great getting to see other styles of expressions from you, and your talent in wordplay.
Also ended up being God-timed, as I was praying through something that resonated with this about someone. God is definitely good.
He's definitely blessed you with writing talent, and I hope to see more of your experimental poetry!
K. L. Topaz 2008-12-08 . chapter 1
very nice, love the imagery!
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