Damn, a pretty crushing poem as far as pride goes. Seriously, just constantly berating yourself, it makes me angry to read something like this lol!
Aside from the occasional grammar flaw, I really did like this piece. You have a good voice, it shines through your writing, though you probably can't even notice. I was able to follow along the whole time pretty well, too. I wouldn't put this poem on any majestic pedestal, but it did a good job of putting me in your shoes, and for that, I can appreciate it. Take care!

"Facade as strong as steel,

As long as you keep believing,

My broken smile is real."
These lines hit home, your feelings came through keep it up :)