I like this. The repetition works really well as does the italics of it. The piece is really great and bittersweet.

Oh! I love the image of two little fireflies dancing and flying with each other against the dark night sky. D

Wow, fantastic. It's like a song, (actually, it may very well be, I don't think I looked to see) and I loved how you accented the chorus and added a line each time. It was beautiful in the presentation and the whole idea of two fireflies is lovely. Excellent imagery and thoughts behind it, excellent job!

Best wishes!)

"With our shallow issues/and forced smiles,/we can avoid talking/about what we really feel/since nobody cares." Such powerfull lines and great imagery as well. Your piece flowed smootly but the point was still maintained and not disturbed. Well done!

This might be my favorite of all your songs and poems. I really like the chorus.

This is great, as always, i love it.

Lovely. "Like two fireflies". I love that, and the whole idea of the poem.

:):)

“With our shallow issues and forced smiles, we can avoid talking about what we really feel since nobody cares” is great! Like all of your poems this is a song.

Very cute. I like fireflies. And I like the way you added lines to the italicized stanza. )