I've read this a few times and I like it more every time. Once again I'm torn between thinking this is a funny piece and seeing it as poetry about desire with fruit as a metaphor for a person. Whatever, I want an orange now.

Peace.

Haha. I don't know, the last line made me laugh. I'm gonna start saying that: "You, my vitamin C"!

I love it: how you describe the fruit, making it sound so delicious. And I love how you describe eating it, so completely. And the part: So that a piece of you/May grow in me. :D. Not a very helpful review, here; sorry, just.. saying I love this.

Ooh, very nice man. Excellent descriptors, in fact this is like borderline-vivid stuff lol. But in a good way.

Very short and powerful.

interesting subject. It was good.

Interesting idea. A person compared to a citrus fruit. I like the contrasts in that: sweet/sour, rough/soft . . . nice!

[Swallow your seeds/So that a piece of you/May grow in me] very interesting point of your conceit. The parrallels you drew are very creative.

the only thing I dislike about this is the last line. It goes well with the rest of the poem, and would fit well within it, but it just doesn't seem to be too powerful for the end. just a friendly suggestion :)

Great work!

Really original. Simple but a great idea. Loved it :)

lol, your vitamin C, it can go so many ways from there on. Great poem, loved it!