This is very nice, but it is the same document as your "All That Glitters" story. Was there a mistake with the formatting? Because I would really like to read "What was".

Aw! I favourited this! I really enjoyed reading it! It was just really nice to read.
Could you do me a favour and read + review my story? It's really fun to read, because you get to immerse yourself in being a celebrity (we all want to)!
Thanks!
Loved the story!
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Dreams are good for writers. Random is good for readers :) Very good! Another delightful read. I can still see the gondola and the water, it was all so vividly put. Hope to see more soon!

- Aranel

Very good writing. Your descriptions are excellent, I can easily picture the characters in my mind. I thought that your dialogue was realistic too.

A bit about the plot...it seems really improbable that they'd be dating for more than a year and she didn't know he was a movie star. Obviously she knew of him before...since her friend was crrazy about him and they had this conversation about whether his eyes or his shoulders (?!) was sexier.
Also how could she not know something was weird since obviously he never met any of her friends. And why would the paparazzi be all over him so suddenly when she never saw any inkling of them before.

It's sad that she didn't feel worthy of him just because he was famous...insecurity.

Some of your lines can only be described as elegant.
"We couldn’t shine together, in his glow I diminished" (I'll have to use that on someone someday:)
"blossom like a red rose in a grey world" Good imagery

I noticed a few words that I did not recognize eg
"Bluestocking" what's that?
"Schmaltziness" I can infer what it means from the context but still...is it a made up word?
"YSL" again I can infer its meaning but what is it really?

S

Sorry, I accidentally favorited your story... I hate this new format.

I really liked this paragraph: 'It went on like that. IM conversations at midnight that if you pasted them on Word documents reached twelve pages, marathon phone calls, infrequent little dates that I psychoanalyzed for weeks afterwards. We never did go to the movies together, though. We went to parks or bars or just drove around aimlessly. Made out sitting on the dewy grass by the shadows of birch trees. Used too many emoticons when we were chatting.'

I was going to say that you had no grammatical errors, except this: their their Manolo
Just one their.

Wow, I liked it. As in, finally one of those actor-meets-normal-girl story that I can believe. As far as I'm concerned, it's 'realistic,' sad but not overridden angst. I liked your similes, I guess you could say, and/or the way you described things. There was a wide range of vocabulary, I guess is one way of saying it. I like how you characterized the main character, like how she walks with her 'head bent' and the 'little nervous, little self-conscious' line. And how she said '**' when he said he loved her. That was somewhat amusing, and something that could/would happen.

Negative things: well, I found one typo. I hope that qualifies for the negative. I wasn't exactly sure of the timeline, so I can't say whether or not he loved her a little bit too readily or rushed. But then there's the whole 'To him I was just the cliché' line, which both can say that she's just the projected image of what he likes, or the perfect girl, the perfect individual, for him.

The beginning says 'Hey weren't you' so, does that mean they didn't end up together? Or am I still sleepy? Then, along the story there's 'was' and we 'met' on a Friday night.

Interesting/Good start.

Hey Sera!
I was just about to respond to your PM when FP emailed me to say you'd just posted a new story.
Resolving to review it immediately, lest I get caught up in my two person book club, I found myself intrigued.
Is this going to be continued?!
I am anxious to know the particulars!

Favourite Lines:
"My face, half-smiling, a little nervous, a little self-conscious, snapped by friends’ lenses and meant for nothing more than dust-mottled family albums."

She's obviously somebody most of us girls can relate to. As I read, I imagined she had a reluctant smile tugging at her mouth as she was torn between intoxication, as it seems to be, of her lover, and the completely unbelievability of the situation. In fact this seems to be a throw back to the nature of her entire life. She seems to carry out the motions, care about the reputation. She's the sort of person who isn't overly clever nor stupid, and therefore fades away into the crowd very easily. She has neither overtly negative nor positive qualities to distinguish her from everyone else. This movie star discovering her seems to be the height of her otherwise monotonous existence.

Which leads to my wondering, if this story is continued, will the main theme be about her new awareness of the world as an individual, making her own mark? What would happen if he were to re enter her life? How would she react?

This has really got me thinking!

Oh and yes I do have a Facebook which I don't use all that often. I also have myspace...? Are you interested in befriending me lol? The internet lends a whole new way of the whole pen pal system, yes?