I have never reviewed anyone before, but I really like your style. I think this story is great. It's interesting to read and the details are intriguing but yet sparse enough not to distract from the underlying journey/point of the story. A lot of your stories are like modern parables without all the religious baggage… They are insightful windows into the human experience.

wow- that was really good! it was very original- not something you'd read every day. in fact, i found the entire story to be very refreshing with the character choices, and the environment- i was thinking to myself as i was reading this: 'when in the heck are we?' haha. the only thing i'll tell you to look out for are mistakes in grammar and a reminder to not be so wordy. otherwise, you did a VERY nice job on this- keep it up!