aw, it's very heartbroken, I like the beginning about crying.

I'm normally not a huge fan of rhyme, but you executed your rhyme scheme with good flow and rhythm. There wasn't one syllable too many or too few. Great job! Please remember to use periods though. Also, some parts strike me as a tad cliche, but I know most people don't believe in editing poetry. The last stanza struck me as very relatable. That's what the feeling is summed up into words. You were able to capture the ache, the could've-beens, the yearning-- everything. Thanks for doing that. For a "first real poem," this was great!

One word- amazing. This one really moved me. And you've got the rhyme thing going on here without making it sound sappy.. I can never do that. Overall, a really good poem.