I loved that beginning bit, and the whole effect of the piece. It could go on to be more... But I think it would have to have an uber cool plot... (No offence, or anything, but with a start like that it would have to be involving the whole way through) I especially like the way you've portrayed that other girls emotions towards the whole situation. Unrealistic in a very realistic way... Loved it :D

I like it a lot. I tihnk you should keep going.

wow that was really good. how did that one girl know she wasnt going to kill herself? Was she a prophet or a psyhcic? I caught that how she said see you around. Anyway you hav to continue this story i can see it going great places and im glad 2 B THE FIRST reviewer