Awwe, you should have made this more than a one-shot. You should have made it into chapters.

Two reviews from me within minutes of each other! Aren't you lucky (haha, just kidding.)

You have a knack for capturing the emotional strain of someone going through trials. Congrats. This was very moving.

Wow. This is really, really good.
Very emotional. It's like it was bursting off the page. That's amazing.

I can feel the sadness, my eyes are all watery now. You're awesome at emotional bits, eh? I think I really suck at that.

Anyway, this is angsty. And amazingly written, you have talent. I can't believe you're fourteen!
... No, I'm not a stalker, I was just looking at your page before.

Keep it up.

BTW. I like how you used The Fray song at the top. I haven't heard of it, but I'll be sure to listen. It fits in really well.

PS: If this is a one-shot, it's great. If it's not and you'll continue it, even better!

Loved it.

wow, i really like this, please add more!