Truly amazing and indescribable. People may have said this before, but your story is really relatable and it scarily reflects exactly what I'm going through right now and reading this, it makes me feel sad. All in all, it was really well written.

I like the comment your friend left you =P.

..and the story was cute. Normally I'd say there was some hyperbole (sp?) and maybe too much romanticising of the descriptions of the boy's wonderful-ness, but since this is a piece about a.. well... obsession-crush, I guess it's justified =). Kep it up.

"even if you don’t deserve to have my words wasted on you"
I love this line. I can identify with this line. I've used this line. It is filled with both pain and strength and thats what make it (and the piece itself) beuatiful.

I also like the steady repition of "if you only knew." I think it underscored that meaning of the piece very well.

Nicki :P

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It's awesome.
I can't describe it.
I can connect. =))

This was heartbreaking.
I really wish the girl ended up with the guy in the end.
: (
But it was written beautifully, I loved it.

aw this was so sad! =(

Honey, I can totally relate. That was beautiful. Haha when I started reading the first couple of lines I was wondering how you knew so much about my life. Freaky, huh?

And don't worry. We'll find him one day. :).

bitterswet, totally depicts an awkward stage of an unrequited crush/love? yeah but i feel for you sistaa! :D everyone went through this stage at least once. its pretty well-written.no glitches like wrong use o grammar or anything.. ^^ good work!

This is incredibly short, but this is also incredibly well-written. And heart wrenching... the emotion is clearly felt. Props to the wicked monkey for adding this to our c2. (:

Are you sure this is your first oneshot?! Oh my wow, this is absolutely awesome. A few mistakes with some you're and your(s), but that was about all I saw.

AH. MAY. ZING.

You should so relate to this. I loved all the descriptions.

AHMAYZING.

-toffeecakesxox.

This style of writing seems quite different from others on FP, and I liked it. It seemed very honest and touching. Very good!(: The paragraphs could have been broken down into smaller ones though, to make it easier to read. Good job on the language though! The repetition makes it better too, emphasising her point. I think my favourite paragraph was the first; I could sort of visualise the scene(: BTW, the 'you're'(you are) and your (your something) were mixed up.

it's funny because all these girls can relate to what you're saying but it's unfortunate because what you wrote makes so many wonder if they'll never be noticed by that significant other.

i thought this was very well written, i felt your heart ache.

i found your story advertised by your friend on the skow awardfs yahoo group.

i look forward to read more from you.

I liked this! I just think that the paragraphs were a little too concentrated, and it got a bit hard to read. Maybe split up the first and last paragraph into four smaller paragraphs? That way, the reader will be able to read easily.

But emotion wise, I liked it. The description was excellent too. :) Nice piece.

I like it.
:)