 Carus 2008-12-19 . chapter 1I can relate to this poem, and even though you said that you've never felt this way I think you've managed to capture the hopelessness, confusion and depression in this really well.
You seem to be good at short, make-the-reader-think lines at the end of your poems. I like doing that too :)
I think in this one, my favourite line is the first. It provides really lovely imagery which contrasts with the subject.
Well done :)
-Amy |