i love this poem because it proves that day to day life is so poetic."Wasting time I need for all my other commitments,I’ll just feel hungry again later." this is my fav line because it show so much sacrifice so silently. Keep writing.

haha, i like this poem. (: it’s simplistic & still lyrical, & is so incredibly (& unfortunately) easy to relate to. & although it speaks of various annoyances throughout the day, it’s quite a feel-good poem – it reminds me of the rhythm of an average day, which can be stressful & boring at times, but nowadays i often find myself wishing for the monotony of repeated, structured days. sometimes drama is just too much, haha.

i think the format of the poem is interesting. i’ve never thought of making a list into poetry, but it shows just how flexible it is as an art. this is something that i may have to try one day. (: it’s wonderful, it illustrates the day perfectly, chronologically & filled with the personalised, continuous thoughts, complaints & musings of a genuinely likable narrator whom the majority of the population can definitely relate with – which is always a strong point, for if the audience can relate then they can sympathise – laugh when the narrator laughs, cry when the narrator cries & generally assist the persona through their own steps.

the first three lines were most probably my favourite. there’s a kind of irony & humour to it – the fact that they prepare themselves for everything they’re not ready for, but they still haven’t quite reached the point. it really characterises the narrator – we see them doubting themselves, & notice that they’ve more preparation to make & thus most likely a lot more to experience in life, & the likability factor means that the audience wants to witness these experiences through the narrators’ eyes. alternatively, the narrator could also be speaking of how they just woke up & still feel too tired to face the world, giving it a humorous double meaning that can’t help but make the readers smile. i also like the characterisation we gain from the narrator’s grumblings about the bus driver. :D

also, there’s a good use of tripling/rules of three in this poem, as the poem is separated into three lines – the activity they are doing, what the activity consists of, & the narrator’s thoughts on this activity. it makes the poem easy to understand & navigate, & also helps to give the poem its own rhythm – it’s a steady progression through the day, given a steady beat like a clock.

the one thing i might change is in the line: “But unconsciously decide which of it to actually remember.”
when you say “unconscious” that means the state that you are in after fainting & such like. i think it’d be better to opt for the word “subconscious” – meaning in the back of your mind, the part that you have little control over. easy enough mistake the make though, i do it quite frequently haha. (also, i’m pretty much as you described you are in class too). (:

anyways, all in all, great poem! i never thought about making a list into a poem before – that’s just genius!

xx

this is really good. it completely reminds me of one of my closest friends.

I never thought the daily life could sound so poetic, lol. Good Job.

I like this poem, especially the structure of it. I think my favourite part is the first three lines, because it draws the reader in and sets the tone for the rest of the poem - a description of an average day with emotion built into it.
'Why’s everyone so nosey in the morning?' I'm not sure, but I think 'nosey' here should be 'nosy'... also I think this line would read better as 'Why is' instead of 'Why's'.
I also really like the last line, I think it captures the whole tone of the poem really well :)
-Amy