Wow, there is a lot of nice imagery here. I especially like:

"And a trail of spiders become demise" (although I think it should be "becomes" since trail is singular and is the actual subject of the sentence? Unless we're following that whole collective noun rule.)

"And in the morning, dawn strokes
And cries are heard,
Yon stars speak to me.."


The rhymes seem kind of random, though. I'm not sure if that's what you intended. Well, anyway, good work.^^

Hmm, interesting. I'm Christian myself, so I can relate. The whole subject and they words you use to describe it are pretty amazing. Great job.

I love the chemistry of the words. They are picked very carefully, it seems, and carry so much emotion and meaning. I am not religious, but this is a very good interpretation of the Lord's wonders. May the Lord bless you!

Celestia White