With the sickening amount of terribly cliche vampire novels out there, I have found myself absolutely turned off by the vampire genre. (And he onset of those unbearable Twilight books made it even worse, as you can imagine.) But this is a deliciously refreshing take on the whole idea; I don't think I've read about pathetic, homeless vampires before, and I'm really enjoying the whole gang dynamic that has been set up so far. Really looking forward to an update, if you ever continue.

Rich vampires! I’m with you on that one. - And the whole pure idea is one I'd like to see expanded.

But he had always been a little bit frightened of the daylight – I liked that line: it’s very intriguing and manages to be a little bit sinister.

It felt like there was a lot of information in this chapter, but you led me through it smoothly so I think I know what’s going on. The only thing I would point out is that Maria’s death and the resulting fight seemed like a big thing and it was slightly strange it had taken so long to reach Aiden, and hearing about it further along the grape vine kind of made it have less impact.

I did like the image of the two of them watching the sun set from within the dumpster though, and there were some great descriptions of sounds. The pepperoni sticking and the hair beads rattling like bones.

I did also quite like the tension caused by the idea that there is going to be a big fight, and that it’s going to be a whole revenge thing. Bizarrely it reminded me a little bit of a supernatural West Side Story.
Hope you post Chapter 1.

Great story.original great charecters. It had a fresh begining with great potential,please continue.

I like your take on this, more because it's a good ten steps away from the norm.

"Relax. It's not like a little bit of light is going to kill you."

That was good, because it served the purpose of the necessary "my vampires don't work that way" in a short and sweet manner. You posted this to see what kind of reaction you would get? I for one would like to see where it goes.

-Beth

Awesome short little story, I'm currently writing a vampire story as well, and the main character is far from rich. Most of the vampires are just normal people thouggh, not all the big people, I wonder why that's always the case in novels... Anyways, awesome story, great job. ^_^ I would've liked to hear what happens to Nuke, you should write that up. ^_^

I'm actually interested to see where you go with this; you're right, most vampires are rich pretty boys nowadays...it's nice to see something like this, especially at the height of Twilightmania!1!...definitely keep going,I'd like to know what happens...^_^

...Interesting...I'd love to see where you go with this, it's a very interesting idea. ^^ You're right, though...vampires are almost always rich...=/ It's kind of strange. Never noticed it before, but now that I think about it...

Anyway, I'm getting a little off-topic. But just a little. =D I hope you go on and continue this...won't you? Please?

I must admit to being the only person in the U.S. who has not read any of the twilight books (or other significant vampire books) so this story is my first taste of such a thing. I am quite enjoying the gang angle. Please keep writing!