|Reviews for Abandoned|
| Qzie 12/24/08 . chapter 1
Oh, that made me sad. Trying to hold onto a friend after a long time... it gets hard sometimes, but it's worth it. :) Merry Christmas. -Qzie
| AK the Twilight 12/24/08 . chapter 1
"I'm abandoned in a way/with many ways" felt a bit confusing; perhaps the repeated use of the word way made it like that.
The line "and it tastes like the sky" is brilliantly elaborate, definitely one of the best lines throughout. The desperation and confusion fuels this poem's power, and although some lines feel a bit messy, this poem was full of strong imagery and excellent tone. Keep up the excellent work!
| Living Life Free 12/24/08 . chapter 1
"The closed wounds are opend
one more time, welcome
to my prison, to my prison."
This is Great. I've felt like this many times.
| Erlkoenigin 12/23/08 . chapter 1
Ein schöner Song, besonders die Schlußzeile:
I'm abandoned in a way
with many ways,
which one I should pick
to meet you again?
Jetzt fehlt nur noch jemand, der ihn vertont
| Remember Me to Dawn 12/22/08 . chapter 1
I love the emotion. I love the lines "and it tastes like the sky/we fall from/ if you're abandoned" so beautiful
| Natalie-Rayne 12/22/08 . chapter 1
Aww, sweet! I love this song!
| Isca 12/21/08 . chapter 1
"Don't you? I'd like to know." Full of angst! So sad!
"I'm abandoned, in a way." Genuine. Honest. Full of emotion.