A good start. Don't make us wait too long for more.

truly excellent. i applaud you.
the scenarios were truly great and i could see that everything was really very well thought out. things like the stongehenge twist and the spaceship had me nodding my head and very impressed. i really didnt kno what to expect in that little part there and i was elated at what turned out to be. it was really the first time i ever read about something like that and i was really not disappointed.
dialogue was excellent in this chapter. there was plenty of it but it carried the chapter along very nicely and didnt hamper the writing at all. very well done. you made each character's individual manner of speech show very well. brownie points to you for characterization:)
a little part i also like was when you had all of them arguing with each other about who read the fortune cookie. i laughed. it was anice touch. speaking of which, the humour was good here too.
the ending was great, and i really cant wait to see what happens next. oh, i almost forgot to mention that i did see a few grammar and spelling errors here. they seemed to be caused form typos and maybe a quick review from the author could fix them. i think that was really the only flaw i saw.
okey dokey, im done now^_^ once again i commend you and il be looking out for other chapters. keep writing:)

a nice first chapter. there were a few punctuation and spelling errors that a quick revision couldn't fix but other than that it was quite enjoyable. the dialogue was great too. keep writing :)

I like it, it's an intriguing beginning. I'll be back to read more.

Hmm, very interesting first chapter. It came across as just a little bit rushed, but that gave the story a certain feel, I suppose.

Great ending to the chapter, though. Can't wait for more :-)

R&R me?

~JEM~