I can't believe I just read this now...and a fair while after Christmas too. Sigh. I hope you do finish this!
I was grinning the whole way through - especially at all the Australian comments. The Cronulla "I'm not racist" thing was funny and so true and Surrey Hills? Thats about half an hour from where I live. The story FELT like an Australian summer, which was refreshing since many of the stories I read all tend to be set in America.
Mitchell is a great character too, and is written well.
Good work!

I know its not a proper review at all, but I just needed to say this: Vegemite is the most weird, anf original story I ever heard