This is very interesting, but Lori seems very childish. We, a the reader, do not know exactly why she is like this. Bad genes, no father, someone mocked her? There seems to be no explanation for her behavior and I feel that we need one (just a thought). Oh, and 'Wingding'...every time I read it, it makes me happy inside. What inspired you to call the place that? Oh...just one more question. Why does the rain god what her to be his bride? She doesn't seem to be the type he wants to get his hands on.

I guess I will just have to continue reading when the next chapter comes out.

Cute story so far. The girl is dangerous *narrows eyes* poor Ruwa.