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I think the first line, in comparison to th rest, was the weakest. It relied on cliché wordings. "familiar voice" "haunts my memory"... I mean, really. You can do better. The rest of the poem does it better. And the first line should be awesome to draw the reader in.

As for the entire poem, I liked it. I think you have some interesting wordings and descriptions, which for me makes a poem good! Last line was a nice perspective too, haha. Sort of wicked, sort of doom-ish. But in a good way.

-Frac

"when its butterflies" this should be it's.

I liked the line "and his name drips down my fingers", however, ending with "for lift" seemed to ruin it. "For lift" didn't make a whole lot of sense, and the beginning of this line was rather beautiful and original (shocking for a cutting poem). :)

This is the first cutting poem I've ever read that managed to sound almost happy. I don't know why. XD!! Random.

Good job setting the last lines off from the rest of the stanza - it gave them more emphasis. I don't think they needed italics, though, that's kind of over-emphasizing, thus ruining it.

-Jesse
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This feels like something I've been meaning to say.