 inkspatters 2008-12-28 . chapter 1Review Marathon! Link in my profile.
I really like th way you use language because it's different and refreshing. I especially liked this line 'Even their voices stood tall'. That's like poetry in a story to me. Just really good stuff.
Oh, and your beginning was also really strong. Always good, because it sucks your reader in.
Good job,
-Ink- |