I liked this poem alot becuase I really love the format that you put it in, I espesially like the ending. I dont really see anything wrong with this poem :]

I really like the style/format that you've written this in. I think it's really clever, and it definitely makes the first word of each line ('Love' 'Hate' etc) stand out a lot, which I guess is what you were aiming for.
I think that you should rephrase 'Non-live', though. It sounds like it isn't a word and it confused me with what you were trying to say. If I interpreted it right, perhaps change it to:
'Hurt, with a numbing fear that turns to
Apathy, trying to exist in
Negativity' etc etc.
I felt that a some of your word-choices were quite cliched, as well, for example 'Love, a burning passion' or 'numbing fear'. Then again, others were really orginial and effective, like:
'Breathe, the same
Air, I made you
Choke'. I thought that part was really good.
Good poem overall, if you look over it and fix the cliches and a couple of mistakes it'll be a great poem :)
-Amy

i love the style of this. it's amazing

I love the rhythm in this. It's very strong and creates a very distinct pulse.

I also like how you made this one long sentence. That generally doesn't work too well in poetry, but you managed to pull it off. It gave this a rambly feel, but in a good way.

~Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile)