That was so sweet. I wanted to cry when Maggie didn't know that it was Aiden. Which reminds me, you said Jarret twice, I assume that you meant Aiden though.

One other thing, at one point you said leid (this is when they were laying on Maggies bed in the orphanage) and I think that it might make a little more sense to say lay because I thought that it meant that they were lying (as in the bad sense of the word fib). Just a thought.

I kinda wish that this was longer, it seemed like you rushed the ending a little, it was a good ending but you could make it much nicer and sweeter and touching. Only if you want to make it like that though, of course.

All in all I liked it.

That was extremely well written! I really liked it! You write in such a way where the reader immediately gets attached to the characters and cares about what happens to them! Good Job! I can't wait to read this from Maggie's opinion!

Jessica

P.S. In the second paragraph, you accidently wrote 'heard' instead of 'heart'. That was all i found!