This piece has some interesting post-apocalyptic themes, and the imagery you use is strong. This is one of the first pieces I've seen where the lack of captials makes sense (as computers rarely use capitals, unless we program them to).

All in all, I think it's a rather successful piece.

Best of luck in writing,
Bette

"What is a soul?" I love that the robot asked this question. I just smiled. This part was beautiful :) A very creative topic, by the way. Kudos.

i can tell that you are quite good at this...

I really liked it. It was really different and stood out from most of everything else that I've read on this site. It did have a quality of genuine query about human nature (at least, in my opinion it dead) and I loved the verse about "text=something that is dead./text"

Going to check out your other works now, hopefully they'll be as quirky and as odd as the one I've just read.

I really like the robotic quality to this poem! Good job!

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intense. this has that sort of apocalyptic feel, and i feel like quoting so many parts of your poem because so many lines are perfection

i also love the overall idea of this poem and the direction you took with it (the second stanza reminds me of wall-e for some reason) and the third genius was genius in all aspects

the last line tied everything up, and i like the pun (not sure if it's intended... i'm assuming it was)

overall, excellent poem :]