 windy girl 2009-05-11 . chapter 1Whoa, so cool. (: I think the whole rhyme/rhythm scheme (scheme?) worked for this. Love the second stanza.
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 Dirty No Good 2009-03-04 . chapter 1I love you too. |
 t-t-t-ouch. 2009-03-04 . chapter 1This has got a likeable feeling to it, to me, it feels almost tangible, like you could pick it up off the page and throw it into the air and prove it all to be true.
I like it. |
 nightfly 2009-02-14 . chapter 1I like the way this is written, you managed to tug at my heartstrings and make me ponder life as it is without feeling overly angsty. The images you present here are beautiful too - I particularly like the part about being trapped inside love that is leaving and that we're divine spirits sleeping - as if we have the ability to be good and choose wisely, but not everyone wakes up to realise that.
Very well done. |
 Frail.Wings.Of.Vanity 2009-01-17 . chapter 1Wow, I really liked this one. So short but it sent such a strong message. |
 a silenced revolution 2009-01-11 . chapter 1"It's as if we're all trapped inside love that is leaving,"
is an unforgettable line.
Really.
I mean it.
[And the rest is amazing too, but it's that line that I'll always remember.]
P.S. First line of second stanza, you have "are" twice. Just in case you'd want to fix that. |
 shutitoff 2009-01-02 . chapter 1Do you listen to Neutral Milk Hotel?
Because you should. |
 Dawn Gabriel 2008-12-29 . chapter 1I like it. Nice rhyme, sounded professional. And I love you too. |
 RiBow. 2008-12-29 . chapter 1:]. I don't know what to write... maybe because this poem is amazing.
-RiBow.
(Sorry if this was a waste of review to you) |