i don't think it's necessarily so bad. not "wrong" or "disgusting".

but in any case
i like the way the bitterness and angst comes pouring out of this. really raw and emotional.

Oh, my dear, dear Jelly.
I'm sorry you felt that way, but don't expect reprimands from me, cos I do my best not to be a hypocrite. (:
I like the poem, it's raw and kind of angry but real.
I think it's good. There's a lot of emotion in here.