hmm, i cant work out if i liked this, or if i found it scary ... go for both :)

Tell me this is not only a one shot!

WHAT DO YOU LIKE MY STORY FOR!

This is amazingly written, I can FEEL the angst, the fear, the EVERYTHING.

You have my stomach churning like a ruddy mill.

Eh.

Amazing.

Horribly amazing.

Oh, so twisted it's sweet.

Cal is scary.../Shivers Good job! D

-Kiri

Yes. He probably did. -_-

God, you write beautiful.

And the whole thing was a beautiful masterpiece of flowing words and adrenalin. I actually thought Cal was going to force him to jump off with him, but then it ended up...pretty good I guess, in my eyes. Probably not Avery. Cal does seem very dangerous.

x,

Faith

I actually really, really like this; but, maybe that's just me and my love for unscapable ultimatiums. I really like Cal, too.

Okay. That is not a happy ending. My joy bubble has been popped. You have to add another chapter to make it all better. I mean, seriously, he feels like he made a terrible mistake. Okay, that ending leaves you hanging, but it's kind depressing.

...i feel really bad for avery. this story has a really fascinating aspect.

it still makes me sad though. in a good way, i'm sure

Wow. Just wow. Your writing is absolutely incredible. I can't wait to read more of this. Cal is kinda creepy but at least Avery has somewhere to live right now. By the way, how old are they? High school? College? Graduated?

o.o Certainly interesting! Poisonous couples has always been an enticing topic to read. I would love to see more of this couple.

That was really...pretty, I suppose, is the best word for it. It was Titanic, yes? I have to admit, I was kind of giggling throughout that part when I figured it out...but that's just me. Anywho.

I really loved the way that Cal called Avery by little pet names. He's really not a picture of mental health, is he?

I also adored the fact that they aren't going to be happy, and they aren't in love. It added a certain...I'm not sure. Almost reality, but not quite.

Very well done.

Oh. my.

This is not going to end well.

Good job.

Titanic! ... amirite...?

It was...hmm... awesome? Is that the word I'm looking for? Yes, I think it is. hah. I have such a way with words. xD

holy crap that was well written! Damn it being a oneshot because I want more :(

what was the movie scene?