Mechanics: Faelein

Originality: Chiomi

Best: Faelein

Mechanics: Chiomi
Originality: Faelein
Best: BlackCat

Mechanics-"I Love You,Laissez-Moi" by Black Cat
Originality-"Untitled" by Courtney
Best-"Sheherazade" by Chiomi

Originality: "I Love You, Laissez-Moi" by BlackCat
Mechanics: "Untitled" by Courtney
Best: "Sheherazade" by Chiomi

Mech—"I Love You, Laissez-Moi" by BlackCat

Orig—"Sheherazade" by Chiomi

Best—"Silence" by Faelein

Interesting round this month.

Mech: "I Love You, Laissez-Moi" by BlackCat
Orig: "Untitled" by Courtney
Best: "Sheherazade" by Chiomi

Oh no! That was sad...

I like this one a lot better than the others...Ri is fun.

Cute. It does feel rushed, but if you do decide to take the time to expand it, I think it will get a lot better.

There's definitely potential here; Labina and her husband/not-husband certainly have an interesting story. The whole honey thing is too ridiculous to support the story, though, and the story as a whole was a bit hard to follow.

Interesting character in an interesting situation. The parenthetical asides are a bit distracting--could you include that information a different way?

Aw. Cute story, interesting style. Sentence structure could use some work.

—Mechanics—Faelein

—Originality—Courtney

—Best—BlackCat

Mechanics - BlackCat
Originality - Henred5
Best - Henred5


(Courtney)

I may not be able to submit, but I can still vote! :)

Mechanics: Courtney
Originality: Henred5
Best: Faelein